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Anne Frank by ~Holy-Mecha:iconHoly-Mecha:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Open


  The girl was a bone,
a stick held
upright
by the fierce, unyielding passion
of her mind
alone.

  She smiled
and she was beautiful,
so beautiful
I could cry
for joy
and shout to the hills;

but when I closed her book,
she was dead.
©2005-2009 ~Holy-Mecha
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Author's Comments

This is a poem inspired by a mistake a friend of mine (Meredith) once made. For the record, I haven't ever read Anne Frank.

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*diamondie Jun 22, 2005, 3:29:44 AM
Interesting poem. I like the imagery in the first stanza and the ending is good in its abruptness, but I think the second stanza is too cheesy and corny, even if it's intended to be that way.
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~Penslinger Jun 22, 2005, 4:13:34 AM
I really like that, personally I felt that even if it was sentimental, it was brief enough that it avoided descending into being cheesy.
And look at you, writing without any real form!

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"the way to create art is to burn and destroy
ordinary concepts and to substitute them
with new truths that run down from the top of the head
and out from the heart"
- C. Bukowski
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~Holy-Mecha Jun 22, 2005, 8:11:04 AM
Sadly it isn't intended to be cheesy; I may address that. Thanks for the honest critique :)

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~Holy-Mecha Jun 22, 2005, 8:11:42 AM
I'm proud :D

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~Panda-Cat Jan 13, 2008, 2:08:37 PM
im reading the book, and it is gooood!

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~xglassgalaxyx May 2, 2008, 6:23:00 PM
Thats beautiful. you should read it.

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~CountessMonicahVoy Jan 9, 2009, 1:47:52 PM
* simply it's what I mean -.-'
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~caitYrox101 Jun 13, 2009, 6:53:15 PM
I love Anne Frank. I love this too...very touching. i made one called 'Fear', it would be cool if you checked it out :B

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